Hitting the Target

I’m reading Alias Grace by Margaret Atwood. I’m only at the beginning, a couple of chapters in, but it’s making me think about writing with a sort of precision, so that every word is perfect, every word counts. That’s what Atwood does, and it’s part of the reason she’s such a good writer. Every word she writes hits the target, at the center of the target.

I thought I would give you an example. These are the first three paragraphs of the first chapter:

“I am sitting on the purple velvet settee in the Governor’s parlour, the Governor’s wife’s parlour; it has always been the Governor’s wife’s parlour although it has not always been the same wife, as they change them around according to the politics.  I have my hands folded in my lap the proper way although I have no gloves.  The gloves I would wish to have would be smooth and white, and would fit without a wrinkle.

“I am often in this parlour, clearing away the tea things and dusting the small tables and the long mirror with the frame of grapes and leaves around it, and the pianoforte; and the tall clock that came from Europe, with the orange-gold sun and the silver moon, that go in and out according to the time of day and week of the month.  I like the clock best of anything in the parlour, although it measures time and I have too much of that on my hands already.

“But I have never sat down on the settee before, as it is for the guests.  Mrs. Alderman Parkinson said a lady must never sit in a chair a gentleman has just vacated, though she would not say why; but Mary Whitney said, Because, you silly goose, it’s still warm from his bum; which was a coarse thing to say.  So I cannot sit here without thinking of the ladylike bums that have sat on this very settee, all delicate and white, like wobbly soft-boiled eggs.”

What is it about these paragraphs that I find so perfect? The novel is about Grace Marks, a notorious murderess — who may not be a murderess after all, I don’t know yet and I’m not sure Atwood is going to tell me. Here I’m seeing the world through Grace’s eyes; she’s the one describing her surroundings. And I get such a sense of her as a person. She notices trivialities, she had a clear sense of her position and also her grievances, she is an astute social observer. She also speaks in a way that is poetic, almost stream of consciousness — when Atwood moves into the perspectives of other characters, the language becomes more structured, more typically Victorian. So the language fits the character. And I love the freshness and precision of the images, particularly the bums like wobbly soft-boiled eggs. I can see those women, can’t you?

But finally I think it’s a matter of ear, the fact that the sentences all sound right: there isn’t a wasted word in them. All the words fits into the rhythms of the sentences. Language is like music in that you can hear when it works. You can hear the perfection of a Mozart sonata, and you can hear the perfection of prose that is hitting its target. It’s the satisfaction of an arrow sinking into the center. (The target is your mind, your heart.)

It’s good for me to be reading this novel now, when I’m writing my own. What I’m writing is a first novel, and an adventure story of sorts. It makes no effort to be as sophisticated as Alias Grace. I’m not going to be Margaret Atwood, not on my first try! But it’s useful to have prose of that quality going through my head as I’m trying to write my own.

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4 thoughts on “Hitting the Target

  1. An interesting parallell between you and Atwood is that she, too, is an accomplished poet; something which is largely overlooked these days. (She won the Governor General’s Award for Poetry in 1966 – a huge Canadian honour – for her book of poems “The Circle Game” which I recommend if you haven’t come across it yet.)

    I do wonder how much the two influence one another, when a writer writes both poetry and prose.

    And…if I might be so bold…I do see similarities between your writing and hers: You share a certain clarity of thought and elegance of style. Not to mention a wicked sense of humour and observation. If memory serves, it was in Alias Grace where she had a description involving a pillow case and a pair of rodents…

    • Thank you! That’s a huge compliment. :) I do think the poetry and prose influence each other, and I think of other writers I know who are also poets — I think you definitely see the poetry in the prose, even though the two are quite different and you have to make sure the prose doesn’t get too poetic. I haven’t gotten to the pillow case and pair of rodents yet. Hmmm, will be watching for that!

  2. Are you writing with a first point of view? Just curious. Umh..maybe you can do a blog post on point of views? I’m dying to know your take on that.
    The snippet you shared is intimate.and I’m adding Alias Grace to my To-Be-Read list.
    Good luck with writing your first novel!

    • I’m writing from a combination of POVs: first and third, depending on what I need. It’s rather complicated, actually. A blog post on POV would be a good idea. Let me think about how to write it! :) And thanks . . .

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